I really liked this piece. Really conveyed emotion . Keep up the good work. If you could, check out some of my work. I think you would really like it. Thank you and nice job.

Loved this poem
keep it up
<3jess

Wow! You don't expect those three words at all. It's a very good piece. You can feel your longing for this person in every way. The only thing I suggest is working on your flow. Keeping your syllable count consistent so the reader has a smoother ride throughout. But overall....good piece!
Thanks for all those comments :)
Charisma*