Beautiful

Very nice
it was really good
the flow needs some work
but it was a deep message
nice job

Nice write. The poem itself is akin to an excitable rant of emotional steam. It reminds me of a confused someone, yet is still able to think properly, especially in difficult circumstances. The pitch and rhythm set off vigorous pace throughout, which is seemingly forceful; and the emotions raw and well versed. An interesting read.

I really loved the way you ended this and I LOVED the content. It was a real eye-opener piece.
God I love you lol.
Keep it up. :)
5/5

Different but good. good job

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david