Comments : Angel of Mine

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Nice start. Because I want to help you improve, here's some tips.
    Make sure you're using the right "your" or "you're"

    For every tear I shed, you're there to comfort
    For every laugh I give, you're there to see me smile

    I could see your grin even far away
    Like the sun brightening up my every day.
    From far away your laughter arose
    Even through the roar of the violent sea.

    Those soft wings you hide--I can see
    I could feel the emotions swimming
    Inside that mind of yours

    You're my guardian in every step.
    Always shielding me no matter where I am.

    You make me laugh like a child
    Smile like a love-strucked girl
    and make every day a memory...

    Worth calling you an Angel of Mine