O.O What happened to this poor girl?! Did she die because she got ganged up on? Or...what? :S I seem to be missing the whole point lol. It left me wanting to know more. Which is good. In a way o.O

The flow was there, but the rhymes seemed a little cliche. Try using new rhymes that you don't normally see and it'll turn up better. Not that yours was horrible or anything. It just needs something. Good write ^_^ 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I have to say I didn't really like this poem. It was rushed and didn't convey in heart in it. It sounded like you wanted to write a sad poem just to be writing a sad poem and it didn't work out very well. I'm sorry, but this was definetely not your best and you could've done better than this.

Aweh, I for one loved this because this happened to my favorite teddy and I am still upset over it lol. Great poem, captures, once again, an insight to a little child`s mind...and I love that about your work.

5.5
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