I love this poem! in a way, i've thought these same thoughts multiple times with my guy...exceot the distance wasnt literal, just metaphorical...

great job!

[mind checking out some of mine]

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Wow that was deep casey i love it one of my favorites of yours keep it up girl....

//* Excellent poem. Very heartfelt. You write beyond your age. && I'm young myself.
Love does hurt :(. I've been through a lot of heartbreaks; too much too soon. But I've learned that it does get better with time && eventually someone walks in your life && you realize why it never worked out with anyone else. I'm just waiting for that someone,,*

Anyway, great job && Keep it up!
Take Care!

-Shannon <3

Ok casey is this poem about me or the other josh well good poem any ways love ya me

Who ever knew
Love could hurt so much?
I never would have thought
I'd miss your every touch
((I have mixed feelings about this opening. I like it, but...it, i dont' know its just not super powerful to me. But it is oh-so true...))

I kissed another boy
I wish it had been you
And when I say my prayers
I pretend you love me too
((Wow.. this shows how people want to move on to someone new, but when you heart isn't ready...you can't. Your every thought is with that person and you compare everyone with them. Pretending is what a lot of people do in these situations. This one, was really powerful to me))

You said it was too hard
Dealing with the miles
What I miss the most
Is the way my heart would smile
((I liked this one, but again...it wasn't as powerful to me as the rest. I don't know...it didn't really flow all that well. But love...is through thick and thin. not just the thin, if you love someone...the miles should only make that love stronger))

I know you want some contact
A girl to love and hold
But baby I still love you
No matter what words you've told
((Wow, this was great! It shows how much love you really have for this person. That even if you can't see him...you still want to be with him. That in the end, it should be all worth it))

You said you really did love me
That it was genuine and true
But what was with the promises?
When it was me who followed through
((Promises, are like pixie-dust. They look good at the moment, but they soon fade away. Meaning nothing to anyone but the person that saw it. Like me, you always look back on things and question them. Wondering if you were just to gullible about the situation))

I said I'd always love you
And I do with all my heart
I'm sorry you couldn't deal with
Being so far apart
((I liked the way this one was worded…but the flow was kind of off. But it shows how you were genuine in the feelings, but it was the other person who couldn't handle it))

You don't care that I love you
I guess you don't understand
But you've left marks on my heart
Like footprints in the sand
((WOW! This is probably my favorite one. The last two lines are amazing! And..it spoke me. It starts to show how angry you are about this situation. How…why isn't love enough? I loved you, why wasn't that enough? Great stanza. By far my favorite))

Honey I love you dearly
But I'm holding on by letting go
I'll stay strong for you and me
I won't let my sadness show
((Mixed feelings about this one. I like it, but…to me it doesn't fit. But then again, in a way. It does. I love the second line. "But I'm holding on by letting go" such powerful words. Also, like me, I need to realize that just because I'm sad, or crying. That doesn't mean I am weak. I am weak for wondering what others would think of me, if I did cry. That is what makes a person weak))

Who ever knew
Love could hurt so much?
Forever and always is over
And yet I still feel your touch…
((Again…not a very strong ending. Lol, I love strong endings. Something that just ties the piece together and hits home. Don't get me wrong, it is a good stanza…but not your best. I KNOW you are a talented writer…and you can accomplish that.))

Wonderful poem. And, I know I kinda said some things about the poem…that depicted it, but I really do like this. And, I'm only one person. So. That is just what I feel. You did an amazing job, and it really spoke to my heart. You keep writing babe.

I very much enjoyed that!
Gosh, that sure pulls on my heart strings.
That first stanza(and last) could've been better, but the rest were strong and kept me reading.
Good job. 5/5

I kissed another boy
I wish it had been you
And when I say my prayers
I pretend you love me too

^^ i just really related to that verse it was so freakin well written great job girly!
5/5 seriously though like amazing poem

This was a very beautiful write. i loved it all. very heartfelt and touching. i love poems that come from a very person's heart, and i can tell this one did.

You said it was too hard
Dealing with the miles
What I miss the most
Is the way my heart would smile

i loved that stanza alot. especially the last line. very sweet and pure. you did an excellent job on this, keep it up. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

I said I'd always love you
And I do with all my heart
I'm sorry you couldn't deal with
Being so far apart

Very good Stanza I really like it.

I kissed another boy
I wish it had been you
And when I say my prayers
I pretend you love me too

this stanza seemed to be out of place, i'm not sure if it's suppose to show that you've moved on or if you've cheated, and that is why it is that way.

I liked the poem and gave it a five, wonderful read.