I thought it was ok. the flow was a little off but i liked the concept of the piece. it seemed as though you had alot of ideas for this poem, and you jumbled a few together. but other than that, a great piece

I noticed a lot of spelling errors and the flow wasn't that great, but, I it was great and you really let the emotions in you go freely through words. So, 4/5.

How did you stand it?
My tearful goodbyes?
My sobbing cries?
I don't understand,
Where was your pity?
i like how you bring up questions in the poem. this poem was a little bumpy on some parts but was very good, and sad! nice job

I dont know why but these lines stood out like a sore thumb

"But not numb enough,
Not dumb enough"

i love the structuring you chose to go with, very unique in style and fit the point of what you were trying to go for, great work!

Now they are disapearing,
`Disappearing

You found an incrediable girl,
`Incredible

But not numb enough,
Not dumb enough
`Those lines really grasped me . Simple, been said before, but in your poem just really jumped out . The flow was rocky, but the emotion was there . The ending? Loved it .

..__MiNDYY

This was beautiful.
The emotion was really deep.
The length was a bit too long.
Overall, this was a great peice.
Great job!
5/5

XxAmberxX

Wow, floods of comments!
You deserve them :)

I liked this poem. (And not just because I was mentioned in it lmao :$)