Thinkin bout you

by Tiffaney   Aug 2, 2007


Know matter what I'm Doing or where I'm at I'm thinking bout you
know matter who I'm with or who I'm talking to I'm thinking bout u
know matter if I'm asleep or awake I'm thinking bout you
your always on my mind and in my dreams and i love you

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  • 17 years ago

    by Atrum Dominatio Donum ut is Letalis of Regnum

    Nicely written, a good portrayal of feelings :)

  • 17 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    No capital D, 'about' DON'T USE INTERNET SLANG PLEASE!!!! I three first lines started off good, but the last 2 lines are a bit randomly jumbeled up...
    example structure them better

    eg]
    your always on my mind,
    Forever in my dreams,
    And you know what?
    I really love you and anyone can tell that it's true"

    Make it more longer, fit the words together, make it just a little more interesting and compatable if u no what I mean....
    So yeah try it when ur thinkin bout writing another poem, think about how you present the ending to ur poem, make it stand out the most, for people will read the end and judge the whole poem...so yeah good luck, but dont think i said this is a bad poem, it has a great chance of success...
    Good luck
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  • 17 years ago

    by John

    This really sweet keep it up! :-D

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