Wow i love this poem! the rhyming is perfect making it flow really well, and the speed is kept slow to make it feel sadder. its hard to pull out any bit that stands out, but these lines just hit me when i was reading it:
"Crystal clear tears fall down from my eyes
Embedded so deep on my soul torn inside."
i love the way the tears are described, and i can almost feel them piercing thru ur inside (or my inside). you have a brilliant way wth words, well done :)! xxx

Jeannie
This piece has left me speechless. Your writing ability and talent are amazing :) Excellent, breathtaking, heart wrenching, beautiful, and sad. Did I miss anything? Imagery, word choices and flow are right on.
~Bravo~
Love Cindy