A love or a life

by Riley   Aug 3, 2007


I found a true love, but it didn't last.
That beautiful face was one of the past.

I tried to get over it, find someone new.
And I prayed to the lord, to tell me what to do.

I had to walk away, had to keep moving.
But I always longed for the voice so soothing.

So I laid down my arms and asked the heavens above,
To please oh please, give me someone to love.

Someone like the last person, true and caring.
Free of heart, and kind and daring.

Now give your hand, and hear my voice.
Pick a love or a life, that is the choice.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow flow was great and the words so true i think we all question the person we love and the life we should live i dont know but this is very honest in the feeling and emotion 5/5

    laura

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Aw, this poem seems very heartfelt. You expressed emotion beautifully in every line. I'm not usually to fond of this structure, but it suits the piece very well. 5/5/

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Nice rhymes and rythm, flowing well, having a crystal clear and a good message. Intended meaning is lucid, having both lexical and poetic qualities. 5/5

    Tc

    Fsams

  • 17 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    Hey u have such a great knack to write wistful love poems.. and i luvv the sing song verses... has an old fashioned ring to them.. uu could do with makin this piece longer ... to explain more of the feelings.. good work..

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Well this one was pretty good. I liked it
    and the way you explained the person of which you wanted. And the rhyming was great and didnt seem forced

    "Now give your hand, and hear my voice.
    Pick a love or a life, that is the choice. "

    favorite stanza ^^

    but i think the last line needs a little more construction

    but still a great poem

    5/5

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