I can just say awesome loved it
giving you way in my fav poets
5/5 for it
i will get time to read your other poems too
tc
your friend(Hoping to be)
Rohan

Wow great flow nice works, yeah i love the words you use also specially this lines

My stomach's collapsed,
My lungs are burning.
Your beautiful eyes
Drive my sweet yearning.

Great keep it up

I know this feeling all too well! ...and what an amazing feeling it is...

wonderful job! great way of decribing it!

5/5

Wow. i absolutely loved it, you got some talent here. the structure was great the flow was awesome, keep it up 5/5

Personally i dint really like this poem. it was well written though. i think it could have some more rhymes! the flow was ok

I don't know what you mean Rose not your average.
Every stanza had a rhyme.
lol

Ok, well this poem is ok, i dont think its as good as your others. I didnt much like the end it just wasnt good enough for me. But the rest was pretty good

"I have to clench my fists
When you come near.
My tongue gets tied
And I tremble in fear."

favorite stanza ^^

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4/5

To be honest I would say this is a good piece. Lets start with the poetic qualitites, well your poem shows the POETIC LICENCE, that is the shortening in the line 22nd line "tum/tummy"..thats s positive point. It had a fair flow, good word choice.

I think there is room for improvement. Due to syllabic count, the line "On my cheeks and my nose." doesnt go with the flow, instead you can revise it like "On my cheeks and nose" and also the 2nd last stanza seems unpoetic and strange, you could change it and it will be flawless :)

4/5
Fsams

Another beautiful love poem! The flow in this one is a lot better thatn the last poem I read. I liked where you rhymed "tum" and "dumb". lol It was really cute. 5/5

marcella

Absolutely beautiful. I loved how it was so unique and not like anything ive ever read, it was sweet and capturing. It flowed so well and was wrotten perectly.
love Tara-Kay
x

Gosh, you are so very talented. You have a real gift. Your poems are some of the best I have ever read on here. Every stanza, every line was just to good for words to describe. I love it!!
5/5
great write.
*Brittney