Within these...

by Atrum Dominatio Donum ut is Letalis of Regnum   Aug 3, 2007


Within these dying days of late,
Depression be eth thy norm,
I have been unable to help it,
To experience these thoughts of dark,
I have been unable to free my mind,
Despite this however,
I have been able,
To conjure up some thoughts of light,
Thinking, of the one whom I love,
Thinking, of how only she,
Can bring light, throughout my darkness,
I love her with all my heart and soul,
And would give the world to be with her,
And still desire, to give so much more,
She means absolutely everything to me,
Id be unable to exist without her,
For one, Id wish not to,
For another, Id know not how to,
You know who it is,
Of whom I speak of,
The one whom I endlessly love,
For it is you, who I speak of,
It is you, who I love.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like this poem very much. Sorry this is just my opinion but you could use some metaphors and you also could create stronger atmosphere.

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very emotional. The last two lines are very effective ending for the poem. You could write it in stanzas, that would add great effect to the whole piece. 4/5 honestly (I don't want to offend you, it's just my opinion) this one is not as unique as your others, it has too typical topic.

  • 17 years ago

    by Raven

    I love the way you write your poems.
    Amazing

    ~Mz.V

  • 17 years ago

    by Adelle

    Amazing choice of words could so with a little work on the strucher maybe spliting it up a bit if you do poems like this from now on well just an idea exceot for this it is very good.

  • 17 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    Beautiful penned, writing well within beautiful emotions.....lovely yet so heartfelt... well done! You deserve dear..

    Nazeer

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