My pathetic life, crippled by the pain within..
The agony inside me is tormenting my heart..
No one is here.. to comfort me..
I.. am.. No one in this world.

That stanza was simply amazing to me you came out of that writer's block very good. I love your use of wrds. This is such a beautifully written piece.

WOw, this was soo sad. The emotion was almost overwhelming.
You paint a beautiful picture in my mind.
Although no consistant flow, it was still an amazing peice.
Great job!
5/5
XxAmberxX

I like this poem. But with it being all religious it kind of throws me off. I like how your not really sure about the flow all the way through the poem. The wording really could be better. But the meaning really does make sense to me.

Wow, this was...interesting...lol, sorry If I can't say much but I can really feel all the emotions going through here. Loneliness, depression, hurt...yeah, I can feel it. Reading through this, I imagined myself curling up in a ball in the dark corner, crying. <.< okay, too emtional. Anyways, you did a great job on this poem. 5/5

U don't have to say sorry it was really great.. actually i was curious about your title but that curiousity is answered at the end of your poem. Wow it was unique, the emotions were revealed as i keep on reading it was so sad... over all 5. keep it up!!!

A wonderful sad poem.
So deep, so emotional.
The end was beautiful.
The message is great.
I enjoyed reading it.
Take care

I thought it was amazingly written, it was well though of with the words you used, and it was so sad, yet depressing. you could tell that it had alot of emotion behind it, and that it came naturally from you. 5/5

I thought it was pretty good..i little repetitive for my taste..but i really liked the ending..where all you were left to pick you up is yourself...at least thats what I got for it..and i have an understanding of being left alone..and that came across really well..Good luck and good work..

Marc..... =]!

This is just beautiful. Tears in my eyes. Please, don't say you can't write poems, because you really can. It's your talent, your gift. =] Something you'll never loose. Oh, by the way, you know I'm here for you. So you're not alone =]
About the poem.. your emotions, your feelings, really come out in this poem, and it absolutely grapped me. Just had to keep reading it =)
5/5 for my sweet Marcie ^_^
x

'My pathetic life, crippled by the pain within..
The agony inside me is tormenting my heart..
No one is here.. to comfort me..
I.. am.. No one in this world.'

^ Stunning Marc. As your work always is.
I absolutly enjoyed this peice.
Yes the flow was off in some parts,
but the uncertainty radiated through.

The emotion's were overwhelming!
It really got my heart racing, and Im amazed I havn't cried.
Well done,
Elaine.

Wow.. a brilliant write.. i loved it .. loved the imagery.. a brilliant and sad piece of art.. keep it up.

and its not good..its DAMN GOOD

keep it up

~Wake~

I dont think it all fits together, but it was well written still and shows a lot of emotion it is a 5/5 but i still think it could use some work, the ending was wonderful!

Ouch! This hurts! But it's still brilliant! 5/5

This is brillant!
'My pathetic life, crippled by the pain within..
The agony inside me is tormenting my heart..
No one is here.. to comfort me..
I.. am.. No one in this world.'
^favorite stanza. Very powerful. I think that a lot of people can relate to this at some point in their life.
Oh, you are doing great to have writers block! This is simply amazing!!
5/5
keep up the good work.
*Brittney

Very sad! The emotions were very strong making whole poem very powerful.:) It's wierd how depressed people have 2 selfs in them one saying to kill themself other telling not to and you displayed all this very good! And there is some wierd cuteness about it also.
Keep writing, hope you'll find your inspiration soon! But this poem was amazing :)
5/5

"Princess where are you..?
..I will die without your love.."
Did she forsake me in this cold life?
Someone please tell me that I'm dreaming..

I enjoyed this stanza greatly, I honestly didn't notice any writers block:D

I.. am.. No one in this world.

You create tension with the '...'s. A sad and poignant line, very emotive.

Great imagery.
Greta xox

"Princess where are you..?
..I will die without your love.."
Did she forsake me in this cold life?
Someone please tell me that I'm dreaming..

I enjoyed this stanza greatly, I honestly didn't notice any writers block:D

I.. am.. No one in this world.

You create tension with the '...'s. A sad and poignant line, very emotive.

Great imagery.
Greta xox

It is a lot more then good- excellent poem. Every stanza is greatly written, but the fifth stanza is my favorite. I like the wording in this piece. Whole poem is very deep and touching, and the ending is superb.
5/5 from me

In the last few verses you changed to past tense when it had been in present tense which needs fixing I think, but otherwise really good! thankyou for sharing :)

That was real good
i loved the vocabulary and the thought behind it it was sad and painfull
i can relate so much great job 5/5
=] keep up the great work