A beautifully flowing poem. great job

Hey great poem
i like the other one i read better though
but this is good too
your poems could use some punctuation
like comas at the spots where you want us to take in what youve written and stuff it makes the poem look nicer
and it is easier to get the flow
well good job enjoyed it lots and thx again again for the comments

Keenan

This is such a soulful poem lol you put so much emotion into it that every time i read it i would put myself in the situation...great poem, its a TEN!!! lol

Okay, wow. confusing. I mean...it's all there...I read it I understand the words...But then it seems like something else all together. Like a fable or something. Nicely done. I hope this is the one you meant for me to read...cause you have a couple here n all. soo... Yeah. good job!

Happy writing.
Hannah-

Haha cute

i like this line very much though: "she gave to gravity a portion of her life "

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