See look I really like your poetry and all, but I think they are a little deep and long..i mean like, you need to lighten them up at the beginning a bit more and then make them gradually deeper because its just all of a suddern so intense that it just confuses me....thats the best way to descriibe it...but i dont even no if its that..just something doesnt really add up....
^_- but i still think its ur talent that u are so deep
its KEWL