I loved the chorus, it was great. it flowed well and i sung it in my head so i could really feel the message that came across great work. 5/5

Great, it was touching. Nice song.

--Lindsey

"But don't wanna fall
Don't wanna fall
Please don't let me fall for you

I'm trying to hold on
Pretending to be strong
Controlling my feelings for you"

^Beautiful,you really got the message across with the chorus.
Well done, you are talented, and this would make and excellent song.
Keep writting,
Elaine.

Well, I'm a big music fan. I adore it and I really love reading people own made lyrics to songs. They are really hard to comment on though because when you read them they may sound completely different with a beat in the background and a singer, maybe even an instrument.

But don't wanna fall
Don't wanna fall
Please don't let me fall for you

Now this dear, was gorgeous I must say I'd love to hear it made into a song, I was singing along quietly and really enjoyed this piece. Well done all together adorable. 5/5~mel

Hmmm loved the ending
it would be kool to hear the way it sounds when you sing it or get the right writhum
but gread poem =] 5/5

This is such a sweet poem, or sweet lyrics. I could almost hear a melody beginning. This was really cute, I couldn't help but start singing after i read this. You're fantastic, you put a smile on my face!

Very amazing! I find it good how you never used word love, like making it even little bit less temptating. Hope these lyrics soon will have melody also :) Very sweet.
Keep writing 5/5!

I love reading lyrics
i always try to sing to it and put a tune there
which is always interesting
this one came out pretty damn good
and beautiful
chorus could be repeated a few more times
other then that it was lovely and i enjoyed reading it
5/5

Great lyrics, I wish I had the music to go with them lol.

Well, this is indeed a good piece. I would love to hear the actual song and maybe it would have been better. I liked the chorus and the ending, the emotions flowing through it was intensified. 5/5

Singing is one of my deepest passions but this song just made it worth while the lyrics are great and its something i can sing to
5/5 for well written lyrics

Pinoy rocks.........^_^

I'm guessing that this would be a slow song - coz the lines are too long to be a fast song xD

Anyway I think it was a good poem/song. I wish I could listen to it.

Keep up the good work!

Its an amazing....

Nazeer

This is good but i dont think its your best written piece...something just doesnt seem right..but maybe its just me...i think if i heard the music then it might change my mind..

although i do love the chorus..

i still give you a 4/5

Great song.....ganda ng topic.....5/5 ^_^

That was great!.... like the others, i definitely loved the chorus!.. ;)

aside from a few grammatical slip-ups, the poem was nice...would love to hear it with the music!..

by the way, where from the phil are you from?.. :)

I liked it. I thought it would be good as a poem or a song, and it flowed rather well, it didn't lose it's beat or anything and it could be sang if someone really wanted to try. =0

Nice work.

The -Chorus-
was really touching.

-I'm trying to hold on
Pretending to be strong
Controlling my feelings for you- i thought this part had the most emotion in the poem . really like the words you chose, especially -pretending, controlling-