I enjoyed this one. But you chould check the way you spell, 'didtands' distance, 'we have to go' you have to go, 'come one' come on, 'be for' before. Just make sure to correct these mistakes next time. But I really do like your work!!

Good job on this piece. Keep writing.
Take Care Cindy

This was excellent. I loved the emotion and the twist in the end. 5/5
Thank you so much for commenting on mine. It meant alot

I love your emotion in this poem!! It's not like a fairy tale either...even though I usually like those kinds...I really liked the way the poem turned around at the end...keep up the good work!=)