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by Teria Aug 5, 2007 category : Dark, fantasy / other
Roll Over, Your life's upside down. From dusk until dawn, a new day breaking. Aligned with gold, that's utterly breath taking. Perhaps the wind, and it's dearest friend. Could take this life, and bring it to an end. I'm finding myself, in a whirlwind of lies. Filled with copper rods, that run through my eyes. The pain is unbearable, and the joy undecided. The humor is beyond belief, and the memory delighted. "Roll over, your life's upside down," are the only words my lips could find. And, the look upon your face will always haunt my mind - - - - Title given by Ken. xD
by Narphangu
I like it. And, wow, I know the feeling. THe whole, "roll over, your life's upside-down," bit fit right in nicely. I would suggest, though, trying to make your rhymes a bit less forced, and your flow more... easy. But, anyways. Goo' job!