*Finally lets out breath*

Your peice was captivating.
The word use was amazing.
And the flow was flawless.
I was holding my breath the whole time, as urgency radiated through the words.
Amazing job,
Elaine.

I love this!!!!!...i dont know if it was your intention but these would make amazing lyrics...theres a definite tune and tone to it..excellent write 5/5

Very unique word choice and the flow is beautiful. The imagery is good and the lexis possess all positive connotations :)

tc
Fsams

This is so sad but i loved it great job the feeling was great and as i read i was like a story unfolding in front of me great job!!
5/5

laura

I can relate this poet,, it has a deep meaning and and there are some lines that it really touch my heart.. what a fabulous work just keep it up! 5/5

Wow! this showed a lot of emotion it was a creepy poem but well written! i lvoed it 5/5

Omg you must have spent hours on that.
It's so good! <3<3<3 5/5
-Liz

I think whenever we get hurt or heartbroken we hope it's the last time, but the reality is it probably won't be. amazing poem and great flow, very heartfelt and intense. 5/5 GG23

It was a beautifully written piece. it was very powerful and had a lot of emotions behind it. it was a lovely poem to read. nice work 5/5

I loved this poem, your emotion was really out there and the whole vibe it set out was great. I loved the flow, it was flawless and it was fantastic all in all!!
Great job!

As soon as I started reading this I was intrigued. In my mind I was silently thinking, "Let this have a happy ending." -- And it did! I like how you started off so sombre, full of despair, yet the closing message was that of hope, and of not giving up.

Good job.

I can relate to this one.
Excellently written, very powerful and emotional. I like the form of this poem very much, and the words you used to describe emotions.
The first and the third stanzas are my favorite ones.
Great job, you're very talented. 5/5

Brilliant poem. Wondefully written and filled with so much emotion. I loved your word choice and strucure. It also flowed very well. The last stanza was very powerful. 5/5

-Shannon <3

Some poems just yell out to me, this is one of them. i can almost feel the emotion behind it, the sadness, the pain. beautifully written

xx trace

Wow the emotion and feeling put into this poem is overwhelming
xx

Excellent!

it was different from the other that you did! but it was awesome then! the ideas were great! and good concept!

keep it up!

Hey,
an awesome poem, I think that it is a very powerfull and emotional poem. I like that it is sad and it also has an happy ending...once I started to read I couln't stop, the flow is great.
my favorite lines are:
As he screams, blow after blow.
Destroying her mind, body and soul.
5/5
kisses stephanie

Wow this is a really good poem, i think you did a an amazing job on writing it. it was brilliant. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina