Your head will dizzy
you will loose vision

^^ Should be lose...just thought you should know because some people might read it as lose or some like me may be thrown off and see it as loose haha

I thought this was excellent!!!.....That last line was absolutley true! "I am Sin"....it was as if I felt the ground shake reading that....sin is very scary to me because it caused the world to be the way it is....I love the style of this poem....very nice!.....
Chelsey

Would appreciate you reading my work in return!

The stones will crack
and earth will crumble
water will to sand
your body will fumble
i really liked this stanza it was put together wonderfull, the whole poem was well done 5/5

Good poem. Loved the idea of sin. The flow of this poem was good also and it had a strong ending. 5/5

-Shannon <3

I liked it..
Which is weird..Cause I usually don't like Poems under this catergory...
But yeah..The flow was really good through out the whole thing
And the wording was just right for this...

5/5