Real great job
verry emotional and sad but good
=] nice writing 5/5

"Your and orphan left alone." an instead of and.
Besides that, which is no big deal, this was a a very emotionally powerful piece. It is really a great write. It was a little lengthy, for me, [it's quarter to 3 in the morning lol] but I still enjoyed the read. 5/5

marcella

I dont think the flow was perect, and there were parts i didnt quite understand, but i got the whole idea of the poem and the story behind it, it needed a bit more emotion for me but was a good read overall.
love Tara-Kay
x

This is very sad i saw the whole scene unfold right before me its amazing how the words just cptured the reader i think i even cried a bit 5/5

laura

WoW! Thats so awful...but you said it so plainly out, I like that. It took my breath away at how tragic that is. I can't believe it....if something like that happened to me I wouldnt be here writing about it. Keep it up!!

~Morgan~

There was a few mistakes but it was a good poem.I think you should use more vivid vocabulary and break it down into stanzas.But all in all it was filled with emotion and I really liked it.5/5

<3Amber

Thats really sad. I hope it's not a true story. I really like it.

Wow that was long xD but I guess it was worth it. I think the flow was smooth, well done. I like the ending.. it sums up the story of the poem.

I think to improve this you should put it in stanzas.. =)

Very long but uniqe!!!

(r/r/c time=forum)

I enjoyed this piece! Nicely written for the most part. Some grammatical errors and the choice for words could be perfected but other than that the emotional value of this poem was intense! I liked it a lot! :)

OMG how sad i almost started crying. I am so sorry you had to go through all of that. My mom died in a car accident and my dad barely survived. Well great poem i loved it. Keep up the good wor<3

Beautiful poem, i loved it, great job.

This poem seemed it came from the heart and I really liked that about it...It was beautiful..Yet really sad....Overall I have to give you a 5/5...

I hate car crashes...
Very emotional. I love it.
-Jackie

So true i have been in a car crash and this is acctually what it feels like wel i think not sure bout the ambulance i blacked out
5/5