by Esther Aug 6, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
Your bullying me, |
This poem is okay. I know at the end you said the poem wasn't rushed but it seems like it is. It's not mean't to be slow, i know that..but it's just too fast. I liked the topic though, of bullying. To improve this poem I think you need better vocabulary. |
by Melpomene
This poem seemed a little rushed to me. I did like the meaning behind it but it seemed to go to fast. A few better words to strength this piece would create alot better emotions. None the less an interested piece. ~mel |
by SuicideQueen
Cute poem, in that it was short, sweet and straight to the point, and on top of that, it had a rhyme, loved it 5/5 x |