by FallenGrace Aug 7, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
As the shadow that was once his soul, |
by Jenna
I really like this poem ALOT. i can kinda relate...you are a VERY talented writer...you can feel the emotions you put in your writing. GREAT JOB! 5/5 ttyl |
Good poem. i would sugest a little change. i would change screaming and dreaming to screams and dreams. other wise pretty good |
by Nix
Topic is good and message of this poem is great too. I think that this piece is more about life than sad poem. You wrote it superbly. Emotions are excellently expressed and it is really touching. It deserves 5/5 |
by Austin
Gripping amazingly gripping it pulls me in I can hear the foot steps I cna picture one mans life being taken away while the tears hit the floor great job |
by Esther
Wow...sorry but your poem is breathtaking, it captures the scenes of war so well, the emotion. i liked this although it was slightly depressing. welld one keep up the good work. |