I loved this one. It was really suspenseful, and I couldn't wait to read every next stanza.

This is absolutley awesome, i was hooked to every word! YOu've put your emotions across really well, its amazing, well done...
and good luck...
xxx

Ohhh my friend. lovely it touched my heart. there is something inthis poem that attract others to read.
keep it up

Awww! PLEASE continue it! I love it sooo much. This was AMAZING. It is so sad and so sweet. You have SO much talent!!

Like I said when I commented on your first poem, it didn't need anymore parts. The first part is flawless, and now it's getting kindof long and the rhythm is off alot.

HOLY COW! I read all three this was amazing. I mean, I could picture it all in my head and it was so well worded and the flow and rhyme were generally right on. It was very very good!
*ME*