This was a good poem, it was very emotional yet the flow was a bit off. You did great though, I suppose you could try to use more descriptive words, for I got lost in about the middle of it. But then your talent lead me back, so it was good in all. Great job!

That was amazing i really enjoyed reading that you had me hooked!! very nice work!

Decent job. Your rhyming was good except for a few occasions in which I think you threw out grammar to fit the rhyme, which can be alright if it makes sense. You've got a good start.

Nice poem...the rhyming was good ..although in places it seemed forced...

"I cant live without you no more"

^^and i think you should change "no more" to "anymore" in this line.it would flow alot better...it kinda threw the flow completely off at the end...

but overall this poem is pretty good..i give you a 4/5 on this one.