One In A Million<3

by Mandy   Aug 9, 2007


Have you ever had that feeling
When all you think about is him
The twinkle in his eyes
Shining brighter than a gem.

The smile on his face
That caches you completely breathless
The way he looks at you
That leaves you motionless.

The conversations that you have
That keep your heart beating fast
Memories left unspoken
That forever lie in the past.

He's on in a million
The chnaces of meeting him were few
He's perfect in so many ways
The only one for you.

*He's on my mind...24/7
I love him so much!

*please comment!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jaime

    I'm glad you met someone that is so important to you, it's a wonderful feeling isn't it? :)

    I think you have a nice start to your poem, because it has really strong emotions. That, ultimately, is one of the most improtant elements.

    I found the rhyming in the first two stanzas was a little awkward, because they just didn't quite rhyme. And in the last stanza, the line "The chnaces of meeting him were few" didn't seem to fit- except for the fact that it rhymed. The words don't seem to flow that way.

    I think you have a beautiful piece of work here, but it just needs to be cleaned up a little bit. The basics are already there, and with a little effort you should be able to do this easily. Good luck.

    Oh, and watch your spelling. People will take your work more seriously if you don't have stupid little mistakes like that. :)

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