The First Time Ever Did Anything

by Austin   Aug 10, 2007


It was the first time I ever really looked at the sky
The red and pink mix turn the sky into
Something like a cheap valentines day card
But it was the first time I looked at the sky
It was because of her
It was the first time I ever couldn't really breathe
The first time I couldn't help but stare
The first time my jokes were actually funny
It was the first time I couldn't even breathe
It was all because of her
The air was heavy and my heart was racing
It was the first time the words were right
The breeze was soft and the rain was dancing
It was the first time I ever felt alive
The car was quite even the music wasn't heard
It was the first time that all I could hear was my heart
Her words danced around my mind
It was the first time I felt alive
Her touch was soft and smooth
The first time I felt her warmth
I almost lost myself in her eyes
It was the first time I felt alive
That burn of desire the familiar feeling of lust
But this time was different this time was right
Nothing but a hug but lord what a hug it was
It was the first time I felt love the first time night

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  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This piece restates the same facts many times, each line is very simmular to the one before it for the majority of the piece so it lacks intruige and variety. I wish I could rave on and on about this piece, however that is not a possibility. This poem is not simple yet it is not intresting or intricate. The word choice is very bland and nothing about this piece was able to catch my eye.

    I am sorry to say this but I feel this piece was far from your best and at mist it would be worthy of a 3.8 since that is impossible at the moment I gave it a 4. I look forward to reading previous works of yours and even works yet to come, if that is a possibility.

  • 15 years ago

    by Nicole the Fairy

    Naww it is so sweet. =)
    "the first time I felt alive"
    ^ favourite line. =)

    Well done, she'll love it! =)

    5 / 5

    Best wishes,

    Nicole
    xox

  • 17 years ago

    by FallenGrace

    ='[
    and once you lose it theres no getting the feeling back...
    sorry to add such a depressing comment, but it just brings up... memories

    great poem tho, 5/5

    xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I thought the meaning behind the poem was very sweet and the words as well, I just didn't like the fact that you were so repetative with the same words. All in all a great right GG23

  • 17 years ago

    by Lindsay

    This is a cute poem! I enjoyed reading this and I felt the emotion from within this piece! Nice job!

    --Lindsay.

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