I liked the atmosphere of this masterpiece,so dark and haunting
But I would suggest you 2 things about the appeal
Capitalizing i's and the beginning letters of each line
And it would be perfect

Keep it up dear,
Laura

Wow that was a really great Poem! I'm really liking the dark and chilling sequence of it! Very, very awesome! I have a single question, may I use your poem in my fanfiction in later chapters? Do you mind, I won't if you don't want me to. Thank you! You did totally awesome!!

~Hailey

Excellent poem , wonderfully written and the wording was unique , yet haunting with very deep and sad emotions over flowing it, love the thrill of it,
Don't want to go back to the real ground,
don't want to see any person around.
I just want to stay in this
shoddy dreams of mine
in this dark-some solitude till i die
you put me in this , where I fit so well, great write , very talent your friend Tracy d.............5/5

Wow brillaint poem

Amazing poem, keep up the great work.

Such an intense poem with greatly expressed emotion... The flow of the words is amazing and so is the amount of imagination in it...
Nicely written.. 5/5!

Thanx for the comment. :)

Well written & truly felt... Your feelings & sorrow are drifted in your words.. 5/5