Haha wow.. this is gorgeous. It reminds me of an erotic book that you have to keep reading and reading to find out what happens next! Great job. You can visit my selection, although they are EXTREMELY old as i have not yet updated them for years!
All the best for ur future!

This was a very good poem, I loved the emotion and detail. It was very romantic and it didn't seem forced, trying to inflame the reader. It sounded pure and it gave off a good image on your part. You did a great job!

Wow, this was another great piece by you, no matter what style of writing you choose, you always accomplish to prove it that you are a great writer, keep up the great work dear cause you are the best.

a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it

I simply love it =) This was Beautiful! My favorite poem by you! ^_^ The imagery was great throughout the poem, I didn't even notice that it was a long poem, I really enjoyed this great poem. The opening stanza really grabs the reader's attention.. And the ending was SUPERB =) Good job!

Keep up the fantastic work.

Wow, great imagery! There was so much detail and intense emotion. Wonderful flow and nice word choice too. Great job with this one. 5/5

marcella

Wow, you show a lot of imagination! so much detail and emotion! it was intense! the begining really grabs you

I Love Your Work you are an amazing writer.

Excellent and flawless. The whole poem is so powerful and creative. I really felt the imagery in my mind. Wow it was cool. 5.5

tc
Fsams

This is a really good poem I liked it alot =] 5/5 Keep up the good work =]

Wow...uhm ..wow...lol...amazing poem....

jus fix the first line of your poem...there should be changed to their...

but excellent poem i enjoyed reading it. 5/5

Very good and very erotic
very good flow and a beautiful poem about sex

5/5

Wow.I'm speechless.Beautiful poem.It really captures the imagination.lol.That sounds kind of sick.Anyway really great.5/5
-Miranda

"a honey coated sound"
-That line really caught my attention I havn't read a line like that before it was quite unique and interesting. This was a great explict story which ws quite capturing, The descriptions great it really painted a picture into my mind so loved the vivid imagery. Well done on writing such an entertaining erotic piece. Keep up the good work definitly a 5/5 from me.~mel

Haha nice desription i liked the line about his hand tangled in her wet hair or something like that i know im not supposed to read this but shhhhhhhh!!! j/k i know all about that stuff and i think u put it nicely

Learn the difference between plural and possessive. Really.

Wow thats excellent, i couldnt stop reading once id started, i love the way you've written this piece, and the wording. awesome!!

xx trace

Very good poem.
intense but made me eager to find out what happened next.
5.5
keep it up!

I dont really care for these types of poems but you wrote it vey well you used strong words i really dont knwo what to say about it but it is a 5/5

This poem is very intense grate imagery it did not seam forced in any way I really enjoyed it.

Nicely written, good portrayal of feelings and good word use.

5/5 well done :)