Wow amazing, your flow was fantastic, and I liked your vocabulary. It might have been a little over the top. But it was fantasticly done, great job, keep it up.

I thought this one was gonna blow the other one out of the water
and it did
great job
this really brings pictures you the eyes
tis really good

Keenan

Deep seeded passion. strong show of emtion brillant imagery, this is well written, the flow flawlwss, you have done a great job with this, 5/5 even though i believe that you deserce more, kkep writting and I will keep reading

The descriptiveness of this poem is fantastic and this poem is really intense...great job!=]

Strong..it seemd so real.
The words are perfectly put
together. Thanks for
commenting my poems.
I like how you write, how ir
seems so real. :)
keep it up..

Very intense and well detailed..the words are great and very daring, uhm try to rhyme it makes the poem more exciting..well keep it!!

Wow, this was a very good piece, great imagery, flowed well and the descriptions were intense and powerful.
love Tara-Kay
x

Amazing! so much emotion! that got me going a lil bit wow! but amazing job

Very great poem! Very erotic! Keep it up!