This poem was terrific, there were so many metaphors, yet the meaning was quite hard to get out. But it was wonderful, falling into so many illusions. You did great!

I don't like first and last two stanzas. Rest of this poem is excellent, last two stanzas destroy flow completely. This piece is deep and it has great atmosphere. I like the topic and I really enjoyed in this poem(but I really don't like first and last two stanzas)

Amazing poetry
if you have the time,please look over my pieces and lemme know what you think.
take care and keep up your poetry!

I love the flow of your poems gab. They seem so natural. And you vocabulary so simple yet holds such a deep meaning.

Simply breathtaking.
Keep it up..
--Elly.

Wow, another great poem.

First of all, I just wanted to say that your title was amazing. I can never seem to think of good titles. The flow was great, even though it didn't rhyme [and I ususally prefer rhyming poems]. I loved your metaphores. I love all kinds of metaphores. Hehe, I'm a metaphore freak. Well done, sweetie!

Keep writing!
Cayce