by Beauty In The Breaking Aug 11, 2007
category :
Life, society /
other
*This one is a work in progress thats giving me a little hassle coming out all the way lols Give me some time and I'll finish it =D* |
by Nix
It is very interesting. Maybe you could change a few things, you could write one more stanza. I like it, ending is very effective. Whole poem is written greatly! |
by Willow
I agree. if only everyday could be that great.... hmm keep dreaming... lol. great pome so far. 5/5. |
by Lady Nik
Awesome start keep it up, i know it will me a masterpiece when it's finish. And thank you so much for the comment. Shanik |