Dance, Dance my child
Dark, Daunting, Wild
Sleep, Sleep my son
Life but just begun.
this was full of something unspoken and said but you could feel a message or something! i really loved and enjoyed this poem! this is defienently a 5/5

Wow..This was really deep, It was written so beautifully too.. The flow was just amazing through out the whole thing and the wording was so amazing..Just right...I loved the ending also...

5/5

It is a nicely-written, engaging read. The seeming correlation of the gustiness of the winds of trials and challenges to an emotional outburst truly capture my interest in the poem. At first I took it as one of the consequences of premarital sex: single-parenthood, whereas it could be interpreted in every way possible. The pitch was poignant and emotions refined and well conveyed. I truly enjoyed this piece, Leah. All the best!

Thank god this one's not cliched...I loved the uniqueness and the wonderful wording....

I'm too bored to post in the thread, so can you please do my poem winds of change , too hehe

Greatly written piece, it is so powerful, and very dark. I like the choice of words in it. The fourth stanza is my favorite. I like the title, too, it's very captivating.
Well done, 5/5 from me

Fantastic! Wonderfully written poem! Worth reading!

Excellent poem by my standards. The flow was awesome and the rhyming rocked my socks off.

Just one itsy bitsy thing. Your 4th stanza... the rhyming didn't match the rest of the poem and that threw me off just a bit.

I loved how instead of using 'over' you used 'o'er'. You don't see many people who can do that with certain words and still have their poem sound believable.

Excellent job. You've got real talent :)

//* Excellent write. Very deep and dark. Amazing imagery too. The rhyming was good also and the flow was flawless,,*

Keep it up && Take care!

-Shannon <3

This poem is breathtaking, the flow was flawless, and the wording amazing.
I can't explain how this poem made me feel, almost like it will always go unspoken.
And excellent Write,
And a memorable read,
5/5 Elaine.

Oh wow! I love this poem. And Im not just saying that. I hope I can write as good as you one day. 5/5

Hmmmm realy realy nice job
i read it in a slow type of way and that just made it even better =]
and i loved the great vocab it made it have an even more dark affect nice job =]
5/5

This is one of the best poems I have read and I always try and leave honest comments I would love it if you could pm me some time so that we could talk about where you get ur insperation from as I would be really intrested flawless poem i'm adding you to my favorites list.

Wow nice poem i really like it...keep up the good work Manda

The words are wonderful... Eyecathing and breathetaking...
Very great.. Although I didn't get the flow.. ^^
Beautifully penned.. Well done..
This poem deserve 5/5.. :)

Wow..That was really deep. I don't usually comment on dark poems, but this one was magnificent. I was captivated from the beginning of the poem to the end. You really dug deep down in your dark space, lol. I really loved reading this.

Thank you for sharing it. 5/5

It rhymes so well..honestly i don't get the picture..to who it dedicated to?

by the way..you have deep words and that good!!
5/5

This is really good.
they rhyme is great and the imagery and words you used is awesome. good job.

This has an outstanding flow with a great choice of woerds to present the images and the theme

Wonderful write..

"Sky fades into tomorrow
Everlasting, impressing sorrow
Dark, Macabre, Dancing free
Prevailing winds, our enemy"
^^ loved this stanza the most... their is something captivating about it..

"Dance, Dance my child
Dark, Daunting, Wild
Sleep, Sleep my son
Life but just begun."
^^ the repeation of words has added more impact..

great job...

Wow! Your poem is so vivid and so strong!! Very dramatic, and a pleasing read, despite the confusion i experienced over the specific topic at first. I love it! Wonderful ideas, elquent writting skills, simply beautiful. Fantastic!