Slipping On My Memories

Jeannie
What a beautiful piece. Heart breakiing.

No tender dreams
to welcome me
For I'm slipping on
the memories

Tender times from long ago
Fill my heart and stab my soul

Thes lines brought tears to my eyes.
Excellent jjob my friend.
Love Cindy

It always surprises me how you are able to pack so much meaning using such simple words.

'Each time I try to close my eyes,
I slip and fall inside the lies"

beautiful verse Jeannie. especially the last two lines

love and luck
shobhana

Oh my goodness Jeannie!!!....Have you ever had an idea in your head to write a poem about and then go on PnQ and see someone has written something similiar to your idea!?!?!.....THATS WHAT THIS POEM WAS!...I just had an idea just like this to write about because I saw a movie where his wife died and he had a hard time sleeping because there was an empty space in his bed because she wasn't there....I was like wow! A lot of people go through that.....

This was written better than I think I could have done it though! I loved this...its very sad actually but still a beautiful piece!!
Chelsey

Oh that was beautiful :) the flow was flawless, I really like the structure of the poem, good job! :)

Loved the style, flow, and length. It was shorter than most of your pieces, but well put. I really liked the lines

It's midnight now,
I slowly rise
Wipe the teardrops
from my eyes

To the bed I sadly go
Cotton sheets feel so cold

great opening to the poem!
Charisma*