Hey bree bree its a good one lo0ol
keep it up :)

I really like this poem as you capture the moment between the two lovers beautifully.

Even if you are a virgin this is beautiful. That special moment between two lovers was captured and shown in a different light. I loved it.
5/5
*Brittney

I think it was a good poem, I have some suggestions though..

First try to split it into stanzas, Capitalize all the I's :)

And last.. you have some minor errors
Like this line.. (Im) so in love with you,
= I'm

Nonetheless a great poem.