This poem is absolutely adorable=]

This poem is incredible im looking forward to part 2 get to writing! lol

Going mad with all these feelings
of my passion locked up inside
and if i could never have you
id probably sit down and cry.

this is full of emotion! it was a beautiful write 5/5 keep it up

//* Aww, very touching. Great rhyming and the flow was flawless as well.

I really like how you are doing three parts.

-Shannon <3

A beautiful piece.
Words, rhyme were great.
The feelings you have for this girl are very clear.

" going mad with all these feelings
of my passion locked up inside
and if i could never have you
id probably sit down and cry "

This stanza is my favourite.
It was just ..great.
Loved reading this piece.
Take care

This is a really lovely poem unique, I really feel the emothion in it. There are only a couple of things in this poem that could make it better a few spellings = id should be i'd Ive should be Iv'e and its should be it's you wright i alot this should be capital I when not in a word also you need to start your sentances with capitals. I have only noticed these things because they are mistakes I have made alot in the past but since people have been telling me I have stopped makeing them.

I was really good and had great flow but the rhyming sounded too forced and it doesn't seem like it came naturally to you 4/5

A very beautiful poem by you. I hope she knows how you feel!

Take care James,

5/5 Ingrid