by Airika Aug 14, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
There is this boy |
Nice. :) I like that you repeat the beginning lines at the end, but change them a bit. That adds symetry to the poem and ties the beginning and the ending together. I would suggest maybe tweaking the lines a little to make them more similar in length. The long lines followed by really short lines does kind of interrupt the "flow" a little bit. Very nice job, though. Keep writing! |