Wish of mine

by the come back   Aug 14, 2007


Standing on the dark street,
waiting for you to speak
I feel the night is too slow,
I feel that you don't want to glow

I don't want to think,
or even want to breathe
because you are here by my side
that I don't wanna miss

My only wish
is for you to be kissed,
even in a short period of time
for you and I will be on the line

I try to laugh,
even my mind is sad
I try to escape,
but my heart hates

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Try eliminating some of the fillers (I, and, you etc) as a lot of the time the flow runs much smoother for it.
    I really liked the end stanza, I thought it was very powerful and moving.

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Overall a great poem. I gave 5/5 I like the way you write your poems. Keep it up my dear

    Tc'
    Fsams

  • 17 years ago

    by nikki

    It seemed as though you have more than one idea for this one. i liked it but it was sorta everywhere, like you had long sentences and short sentences. it didn't really appeal to me as much as other poems do. i give you a 4/5. sorry

  • 17 years ago

    by lish

    Wow this poem is so strong

  • 17 years ago

    by lish

    Wow beautifully written
    5/5 from me
    xx