Every hour we speak and the laughter
all of that will be surrender,

some grammer mistake in this line bro

my mind resist
it must be resists I think

Many i's arent capital
make them capital

Well now talking about matter
Nice choice of subject
Ya it happens
well done
5/5
YOu rocked in this poem
tc
your friend
Rohan

Mm, an interesting piece, we have all been there. Nice flow and rhyming. Keep it u. Greta

Very good job on this one =) It all flowed good together and the emotions were great =) 5/5
Rhea

I really love your poem......nice flow, rhyming, and also the emotions that it express.....

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Whew... i can feel the pain and sufferinf that you were up to right now coz i'm honestly experiencing it. This one is a good poem but it could look more better if you try to correct some wrong grammar (hope i didn't offend u) keep it up!

When you hold my arm's tight,
my heart beats

yeh dear. friends can be lover too. great wrk take care you deserve 5 again nice work... wihs you good luck in the future. take care

Nice poem. Good emotion again. Just some grammatical errors. My suggestions are at the end of each line, in parentheses

Do friends can be lovers too,(Can two friends be lovers, too)
that my question to you(that's my question to you)
I'm scared to say it to you
because I don't know if you love me too

Everyday we've been together,
every hour we speak and the laughter
all of that will be surrender,(all of that will be surrendered)
when I say I loved her

When you hold my arm's tight,(when you hold my arms tight)
my heart beats
when you hold my hands
my mind resists

It is hard to be with you
now I know that I love you
I don't want to lose you
when I say that I love you

Great Success^^

Good piece of work.Enjoyed reading....
Its a beginning so dont worry if u do mistakes, we all learn from our mistakes..
Keep Up The Good Work!

God Bless U!!!

Do friends can be lovers too?
^ I think this should be changed to "Can friends be lovers too?"

every hour we speak and the laughter
^ This doesn't make sense.

Hmm, this was a fairly good poem. The flow didn't really work very well and the descriptions I thought lacked detail. I did not really like how you did the first stanza, repeating the word "you" so many times really made your words lose effect. To improve, I would say to use more detail, try and use better words to describe hwo you feel and check over your grammer before you post the poem. Keep it up though. 3/5

That's sweet,....ako nga po pala ung c sheena ngcomment s inyo...

Nice poem 4/5 but i think you used you too much just my opinion

"Do friends can be lovers too?" I'm getting the drift that you arn't very good at english or english isnt ur first language....rephrase that bit...
"all of that will be surrendered,
when I say I loved her" That is in between past and present tense!!! it should be like,
all of that will be surrendered,
When I say I love her" or w/e....write it properly!!
"When you hold my arms tight,
my heart beats
when you hold my hands
my mind resists" resists? when u hold my arms tight? wtf!! isnt it suppose to be, when u hold me tight or when I hold u tight in my arms....and that paragraph doesnt really make sense...Last paragraph doesnt really connect doesnt coborate...ur poem doesnt mix or blend well, its kinda just random paragraphs!! i think u need to work on this one aswell
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Good job expressing the love. Keep writing.

Nazeer

I love poems about love :)
love that wich still eludes me lol this poem has a lot in it i loved the touch of inocence :) it gets a 5/5 from me :)

A very beautiful love poem 5/5 i think friends can be lovers. brilliant piece!

xD
~NinjaGirl~

It's okay. This line -->Do friends can be lovers too? makes no sense. Can friends become lovers too? Would make sense. Or maybe even Do friends become lovers too? I just thought it was kind of boring. I'm not usually big on love poems because they often sound so similar and on this one I just think you could have made it better in one way or another. The titles not bad or anything and poems sound nicer if you don't end the line with the same word over and over again like you did with you. Let me look around for some good examples of bad poems and good poems to show you. Or at least my oppinions of them. I'll give this one a three.

This poem was very good. It reminded me of what i once had...Keep up the great work. Keep writing and I'll keep reading

Well this one is very cute,... and you have chosen a nice subject...it's simple and i love simple poetry, maybe you have noticed =P
5/5.. keep up the good work...God bless...Melody..=)

Nice poem and difficult question here: "friends or lovers?".Actually, im going through something like this right now and i know how confusing it feels...Anyway, keep writing and hope you find the answer soon(hope the same for me!).
Take care,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

I like it..It's very cute and short and simple...
Some of the rhyming seemed forced though..
It still was an enjoyable read...

5/5 from me