Omg i love this poem,i can vison so much =]

"m the hero, i'm the killer,
i kill myself, it's a thriller."

- woah. those lines totally sent like a shiver up my spine. and they rolled so easily off my tongue when i read them.

the whole poem was simply wonderful. the imagery was very vivid; i could picture everything in my head. the flow was smooth and the emotions were very enticing. beautifully done.

5.5
take care,
stephanie

Well dark poems are really not my type. But I guess your poem is really good. If I hate it if I have dreams like this. I like how you say that your dream is a journey.

I think to improve this poem you should capitalize all the (I's)

wait...a sound?...a chainsaw?...a scream?
= I like how you used the sense of hearing in this poem, it adds to the description of the poem.

Good job.