This is a simple piece but i like it that way... the emotions were great, i know how it feels. whoa! the flow is okay.. good job!

I really liked this one.
It flowed really well, and was full of emotion's.
It was a splendid peice.
And I really enjoyed it.
Well done,
Keep it up,
Elaine.

I like the topic of your poem, the emotion not so much felt but easy to understand. The flow was okay but i thought it could've been better. Please don't take my opinion the wrong way, the poem was indeed nice. Keep writing. =D

-Bon

I love this...the emotion and depth in this piece are easily sensed.
My favourite part is the last stanza, I loved the ''His arrow missed''.
Flow was good throughout the piece and the imagery portrayed created vivid pictures.