Hey this is really good, i like it.

Awesome poem!! hey candy left a comment before i did. lol well your poem was awesome good job!

The word chice was simple yet effective, and the message was clear, try stepping up the vocab in short poems to add more power and emtion, and You should write words out (u=you) it makes your poem look more professional. I hope my comment isnt harsh just trying to help, over all 4/5 you did a good job