by Meme
Really great poem |
by Michelle18
I think this poem is good but it kinda confused me... =/ hmm.... not sure...but the beginning is great. |
by mier
This is a really great poem, in a sadistic kind of way.... And the intensity expressed here is really amazing.. I like the way you put it into a story... Very creative.. |
by Gasttlee
Sounds a lot like something out of a horror movie! It's perfect! 5/5 |
It does remind me of a horror movie. :] |
by Shinobi
A creepy story indeed. Liked the sentence: "Zzzing in the tent". A nice job, better than the other two I commented. 5/5 |
by Mandy Grace
Wow. very interesting. loved this poem...... great job!!!!! |
by Kaila
Wow...Really liked it! I loved how instead of using all this information in long sentances you shortened it up it made the story more intense. I loved the last line as well your a great writer keep it up |
by Fsams
Wow what a lovely poem. Lovely and provoking. I love this one. It is cohesive and coherent :) 5/5 |
by Jenni Marie
Okay, the imagery in this poem is AMAZING. Striking and vivid and at times somewhat creepy, although I guess that's the point haha. |
by Nigel Oliver
Again, your imagery is amazing |
by Allison
Wow, this was wonderful. I could feel the emotions buried in the words. It read nicely and I loved the way that you worded everything. You have a lot of talent, I didn't even see how it was going to end until I read it. |
by nering
This poem sent chills down my spine...im not sure what made you write this but it was well written. Great job |
by Kaila
Wonderful write |
by xXxVampxXx
Lol wicked poem |
by she
Great poem,just a little confusing to me,if u get the chance please pm me & explain it,but awsome poem! |
by Sarah
So dark. It gave me the chills. |
by Natalie
Zzzing in the tent... |
by Syn
I like it alot 5/5... the last line seems a little confusing cause its saying put this off.. when im sure you mean take this off. |
O.O Wow. Creepy. I loved it. At first it really didn't capture me. Honestly it didn't, but in the middle and the end I was like wow. It was just so vivid and real. And I loved the fact that u made it seem like u were talking and telling some1. That was really neat. 5/5 |