This was a very creative poem Jason. Although I must admit that the flow was a little off. I suggest taking out a few words or either reward it so that it flows much easier. It also seems like you couldn't decide if you wanted this to be a free verse poem or a rhyming one. Don't get me wrong I enjoyed reading it and I liked the whole concept of it. I think that you did an excellent job since you haven't written in a while. I say keep working at it and you'll be one of the greatest in no time. I give you a 5/5 for all your hard working.

Hugs and Kisses
Letty

Nice poem and very creative keep it up