How about

was it really worth it in the end?

i really agree with this poem

although im not against tipsy
on the very rare occasion

but yeah some people are just so stupid
i like this poem because its like

errrr i dunnooo
im sick of popularity :]

Hey hon thanx a lot 4 ur sweet comment. i really like this poem cuz i can take it back to a time where i had done 1 of these things.. like it reminds me of my time and how i was sorta feeling this is the shii lolz. but is it really??... nah really. some ppl go over board and leave this cold world but also their lovers and admirers. i guess u can say life can be just too hard to live by, but still every1 is their own person and needs better in life. drugs arent the answer and never can be.. just a temporary relief. anyways take care and continue writing cuz u seem to have it in ya to write poetry. = )

Suggestions for the ending...

now u r hooked and u wanna stop
but u can't.. and the time is still ticking on the clock,
so u overdose without thinking as your
heart starts sinking... u fight to live
but u cant...
prepare ur mind let out a cool sigh...
this drug took over u... just smile and
think no more sorrows or cries
no thinking about the problems
tomorrow will bring.... just think
of the bell freedom will ring...
as ur mind goes dark..and ur eyes
become heavy u slowly feel ur gonna die,
u fight to live but u cant...because
its too late u already gave the drugs a tri...

its a bit long, but tell me what u think?... lolz ok take care.

Oppsy i made a mistake. if u take out the line on the top saying: 'u fight to live but u cant...'

if u take that out and leave that rest is what i meant to do. i wrote it twice on top and bottom but i meant to leave it only at the bottom. anyways its only a suggestion!

Now u r hooked and u wanna stop
but u can't
not after this long
someday from an overdose
your soul will be removed
your empty heart will cease
and no-one will notice!

i suppose if you like my ending you can use it but it'd be better if you took ideas from it and made it your own. good concept and keep it up!

Hey this is so true vey nice job : )

Great job...i no a few ppl that got hooked like that..great write......~Cindy~

Great job i love the detail in your poems im putting u on my favs.It helps you become more imersed in the poem i think.5/5

Cory