Love your vocabulary.. expression was good.. it captured me and succumbed me into thought.. just one thing though.. i love what you said in your ending but you could fix it.. kinda distracting when i suddenly see a long line and it threw me off a bit.. other than that.. 5/5

~angel~

I loved it very very much its a really great poem no doubts it was also very touching :):)

for sure i will give you 5/5 :):) you worth it

keep up the good work:):)

khuloodan:):)
smile all the time:))