A great poem that is written perfectly, i really enjoyed it... keep it up

a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

Love the poem... keep up the good work

5/5

Okay, so you want to know your mistakes. It's not Loose that you have in the last two stanzas. It should be lose. Loose is like you loosen your shoelaces. Lose is like you're losing hope in something. Just thought you should know that. Not bad for just starting on this site.
Keep it up.