by RobinAnn13 Aug 17, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
She sees your smile |
by Hollymariee
The flow seems a little off sometimes , and it should be much more powerful since it's such a short poem . Try upping the vocabulary and adding punctuation . The idea is a really good start , and it's easy to relate to . Good job .. It's not a perfect 5 , but I'll give it to you anyways . |