Woow this poem is great, I think u should of continued and extended it anyways great job, oh yeh and 1 spelling mistake lol 'feleling' did u mean feeling? anyways please comment on mine, Luv Fay :).

I like this poem because I can feel it's turbulence, especially the ending. The Rhyme seems to work very well; short and sweet (Or bitter =\ whatever floats your boat.)

4/5 for sure.

Take Care.

~Richie