My reflection

by Rose not your average   Aug 18, 2007


My reflection.

When I look into that water,
I feel like I could be slaughtered.
I see a pale face.
That does not belong in this place.

I try and splash the image away.
Thinking that would make it all ok.
It just reforms.
Into the same face.

The eyes are filled with hatred.
It looks so twisted.
Is that me?
Or is it just a face I see?

The eyes are then filled with sadness.
But there is no trace of happiness.
What happened to the sweet loving face?
The face you used to have?

The reflection in the water looks so strong.
It still does not belong.
A tear drops down its cheek
Thinking it is a freak.

No matter how hard I try and believe.
Even if I leave.
I know that is my face,
My own reflection.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Phantasmagoria

    The idea was very good, and the imagery was well done. However I would use a more expanded vocabulary next time -- something that makes the reader think about whats being written, instead of straight-forward text.

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    This is such a poignant, sad poem - great writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Too many I's and filler words. And you rate yourself a 4.5 according to one of the threads.....hmmmmm. I think you are being very generous.

  • 17 years ago

    by audrey harris

    Wow. Beautiful poem, strong write. very powerful 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by callmecrazy

    U show alot of emotions .. its very good.. i like this part alot "I try and splash the image away.
    Thinking that would make it all ok.
    It just reforms.
    Into the same face."
    i can relate to it cuz sometimes i dont like wht i see..
    keep writin

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