You have laid the foundation to be an amazing poet your wording is flawless and the emotion that I feel reading this piece is overwhelming. Please don’t take offense to what I am about to say as I was just like you not long ago in my writing and have learnt a few things that would really improve your piece. 1st you need to capitalize the beginning of your lines and your I's also you need to put in some punctuation in commas every other line would really make a difference in this poem. Hope this helped a bit.

This is a really good poem Shannon. Everything you said in it is so true, and I feel the same. I love the simple vocab you used, and that it wasn't in a particular style, but it worked so well.
I have a few critiques though, just to help you out. =]
I think that you could come up with a more appealing title, that would catch people's eyes and make them want to read it. Also, punctuate your poetry. Add capitals where needed and apostrophies. Things like that.
Hope this helps. Other than that, a very well written piece. =]

Tammie

Don't want to sound corny or anything.. but that "this is one of the best things i read on this site" is reciprocal ... this is EXCELLENT !!! the structure is awesome.. a bit similar to the way im writing now.. long lines. i love this one..
the ending lines are so smart!!!! love this. 5/5 ... i so would've gave it more.

I really like it!! It's well written, and SOOO TRUE!! most people don't wan't things to change, but it's inevitable. really like it!